Rael
02-18-2006, 08:40 PM
This is one of my finished, or as close to finished as it gets, pieces. I don't mind criticism, I welcome it actually, but please make it constructive.
Riding the Lightning
Matt Schneider
3-21-2005
The day moved as slowly as ever, each second an hour, each hour an eternity. You don’t know what waiting is like until you’re waiting to die, with nothing to do but think. Sitting in my cell, I look at the numerous drawings on the wall, my last piece of evidence that I exist. There is only one day left until my day comes, when I will be punished for what I did not do.
The door at the end of the hall opened, and Harry came walking through. He held a canister and what looked like a liquor flask in his hands. “Hey, Harry,” I said to him as he pulled up a chair and sat down outside the bars.
“How you doing?” Harry asked.
“Just waiting for my time. I’m ready.” I looked up at Harry and gave him a forced smile. Harry was my last friend, the last man who believed in my innocence. Even though I knew everyone else would kill me if they got the chance, he didn’t want to. To bad he couldn’t do anything about it. “What do you have there?”
“Your lunch,” he said, unscrewing the lid on the canister. When it opened, I could smell an extremely enticing aroma. My mouth began to water instantly. “I thought maybe you would like something else besides hard bread and water for your last night,” he said, handing me the canister and a spoon.
“Thanks,” I said, with a real smile this time. I took a bite and tasted the single greatest beef stew of my life. Maybe it had something to do with the fact I had eaten bread for the past two months, but it was good. I had to be careful not to eat it too fast. I wanted to savor it as long as I could. “Where’d you get this?” I asked.
“My wife made it. It’s her specialty,” Harry answered with a grin.
“Well there’s a very good reason why. It’s great”
“I got something else for you.” A grim expression came over his face before he did. “Now you know I’m not supposed to be giving you that stew in the first place. I would be fired for sure and possibly prosecuted. If you tell anyone that I gave you this, I could be in very serious trouble.” He handed me the flask and I opened it.
I took a drink and tasted wine, a pretty good wine. “It’s great.” I looked him in the eyes and told him, “After all you have done for me, I would never turn you in. You know that.”
“Yeah, I know. I just have a family to worry about.”
“How many people have been put to the chair by you?” I asked. It was no use dancing around the subject anymore. I wanted it to be out there and in the open. I was tired of hiding from it.
“Man, you don’t want to talk about this-“
“You have no idea what I want to talk about,” I said a little too sternly. Harry was a good guy, but I wanted a straight answer.
“I’ve done a lot,” said Harry. He looked down at the floor. “I never counted, tried not to remember, but I can’t. It’s impossible not to remember the faces of those you killed.” He looked up at me. “You will be the next in my list, and I hate to say that, but that’s how it is. I don’t want to do it, but I am. I’m sorry.”
“I know, Harry.” I looked up at him. “You’re just doing your job.”
I sat and remembered the last time I saw my family. It’s been almost nine months since I last saw them . . .
Opening the paper I saw the chilling headline: Local Girl Raped and Murdered.
“I can’t believe what people are capable of doing sometimes,” I said to Virginia, my wife. Reading down the article I was surprised to see how close to home the murder had taken place.
“I know,” said Virginia, “plus it’s really creepy how close to home it happened. This is a good neighborhood.” She sipped her morning coffee and gave me a cup while she sat down. We loved the neighborhood we lived in; it was quiet and friendly, with really good neighbors who also had children of their own our kids got along with. “You don’t think we need to worry about John and Emily, do you?” Virginia said with a worried look.
“No. I’m sure whoever did this is long gone. I just hope they catch him.”
Reassured, she yelled for the kids to come down and get breakfast before going to school. “I don’t think we should say anything to the kids,” Virginia told me.
“Why not? They’re going to have to face reality at some point in their lives. You can’t protect them forever.”
“I know, but there is no reason they need to confront reality because of this,” she said with a pleading look.
“Okay, I won’t say anything.” Looking at my watch I realized I was running late. “I got to go. I have an early meeting.”
“Okay. Bye,” my wife said after giving me a goodbye kiss.
“Bye,” I said.
If I would have known this was my last time seeing her, I would have said more.
Riding the Lightning
Matt Schneider
3-21-2005
The day moved as slowly as ever, each second an hour, each hour an eternity. You don’t know what waiting is like until you’re waiting to die, with nothing to do but think. Sitting in my cell, I look at the numerous drawings on the wall, my last piece of evidence that I exist. There is only one day left until my day comes, when I will be punished for what I did not do.
The door at the end of the hall opened, and Harry came walking through. He held a canister and what looked like a liquor flask in his hands. “Hey, Harry,” I said to him as he pulled up a chair and sat down outside the bars.
“How you doing?” Harry asked.
“Just waiting for my time. I’m ready.” I looked up at Harry and gave him a forced smile. Harry was my last friend, the last man who believed in my innocence. Even though I knew everyone else would kill me if they got the chance, he didn’t want to. To bad he couldn’t do anything about it. “What do you have there?”
“Your lunch,” he said, unscrewing the lid on the canister. When it opened, I could smell an extremely enticing aroma. My mouth began to water instantly. “I thought maybe you would like something else besides hard bread and water for your last night,” he said, handing me the canister and a spoon.
“Thanks,” I said, with a real smile this time. I took a bite and tasted the single greatest beef stew of my life. Maybe it had something to do with the fact I had eaten bread for the past two months, but it was good. I had to be careful not to eat it too fast. I wanted to savor it as long as I could. “Where’d you get this?” I asked.
“My wife made it. It’s her specialty,” Harry answered with a grin.
“Well there’s a very good reason why. It’s great”
“I got something else for you.” A grim expression came over his face before he did. “Now you know I’m not supposed to be giving you that stew in the first place. I would be fired for sure and possibly prosecuted. If you tell anyone that I gave you this, I could be in very serious trouble.” He handed me the flask and I opened it.
I took a drink and tasted wine, a pretty good wine. “It’s great.” I looked him in the eyes and told him, “After all you have done for me, I would never turn you in. You know that.”
“Yeah, I know. I just have a family to worry about.”
“How many people have been put to the chair by you?” I asked. It was no use dancing around the subject anymore. I wanted it to be out there and in the open. I was tired of hiding from it.
“Man, you don’t want to talk about this-“
“You have no idea what I want to talk about,” I said a little too sternly. Harry was a good guy, but I wanted a straight answer.
“I’ve done a lot,” said Harry. He looked down at the floor. “I never counted, tried not to remember, but I can’t. It’s impossible not to remember the faces of those you killed.” He looked up at me. “You will be the next in my list, and I hate to say that, but that’s how it is. I don’t want to do it, but I am. I’m sorry.”
“I know, Harry.” I looked up at him. “You’re just doing your job.”
I sat and remembered the last time I saw my family. It’s been almost nine months since I last saw them . . .
Opening the paper I saw the chilling headline: Local Girl Raped and Murdered.
“I can’t believe what people are capable of doing sometimes,” I said to Virginia, my wife. Reading down the article I was surprised to see how close to home the murder had taken place.
“I know,” said Virginia, “plus it’s really creepy how close to home it happened. This is a good neighborhood.” She sipped her morning coffee and gave me a cup while she sat down. We loved the neighborhood we lived in; it was quiet and friendly, with really good neighbors who also had children of their own our kids got along with. “You don’t think we need to worry about John and Emily, do you?” Virginia said with a worried look.
“No. I’m sure whoever did this is long gone. I just hope they catch him.”
Reassured, she yelled for the kids to come down and get breakfast before going to school. “I don’t think we should say anything to the kids,” Virginia told me.
“Why not? They’re going to have to face reality at some point in their lives. You can’t protect them forever.”
“I know, but there is no reason they need to confront reality because of this,” she said with a pleading look.
“Okay, I won’t say anything.” Looking at my watch I realized I was running late. “I got to go. I have an early meeting.”
“Okay. Bye,” my wife said after giving me a goodbye kiss.
“Bye,” I said.
If I would have known this was my last time seeing her, I would have said more.